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Shades
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 Posted - 2008/08/17 : 11:18:25
could do with some feedback please guys
this is the full track & has been mixed down on headphones
so the mixdown isn't an issue yet, but if it's ok please say
otherwise, just rip shreads off it, I won't learn any other way
Shades - Funhouse
http://www.mediafire.com/?sharekey=de5d5ded301120bdd2db6fb9a8902bda
I thank you x
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DJ_FunDaBounce
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Posted - 2008/08/18 : 04:05:06
heard this.Here's what I think...
the 2 main things I would work on are the main melody line, perhaps work the underlying chords a bit and those bits were you use the snarefills repeatedly.feels like that doesnt let it build up.simpler snare fills might work better.
mixdown sounds decent for it to be a headphone mix and the applied build up fx are good yet something to keep working at.
thats it I guess.
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Synesthesia
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Posted - 2008/08/19 : 13:07:24
I like this track, it's definitely got potential. The melody and the percussion are good but I think the whole track needs more punch and energy. The kick is ok but it could do with some layering as could the bass, it's got a slight phasing sound which detracts from the overall tone.
The main thing that needs addressing is the timing of the main melody, it's off-beat whereas the kick and bass are on-beat. You need to move either beat or the melody so that they are equally timed.
Here's an Mp3 where I've tried to add a bit more energy and moved the melody so that it's in-time with the beat:
http://www.pdportraits.co.uk/index_files/FunHouse1.mp3
OR...you can take it the other way and move the beat to match the melody:
http://www.pdportraits.co.uk/index_files/FunHouse2.mp3
Hope that helps :)
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Shades
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Posted - 2008/08/19 : 17:05:49
quote:
Originally posted by Synesthesia:
I like this track, it's definitely got potential. The melody and the percussion are good but I think the whole track needs more punch and energy. The kick is ok but it could do with some layering as could the bass, it's got a slight phasing sound which detracts from the overall tone.
The main thing that needs addressing is the timing of the main melody, it's off-beat whereas the kick and bass are on-beat. You need to move either beat or the melody so that they are equally timed.
Here's an Mp3 where I've tried to add a bit more energy and moved the melody so that it's in-time with the beat:
http://www.pdportraits.co.uk/index_files/FunHouse1.mp3
OR...you can take it the other way and move the beat to match the melody:
http://www.pdportraits.co.uk/index_files/FunHouse2.mp3
Hope that helps :)
soon as you mentioned the timing of the lead it clicked as to what was wrong thats been bugging me, my leads been bounced out @ 170 but when i insert it as a wav its out of time even though my mix is 170, i'll correct that later, 
thank you both for your comments
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